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Now I lay me down to sleep
Into a slumber, dark and deep;
And if I die before I wake,
I hope your heart I did not break.

I am not worth your secret tears;
Please, enjoy your golden years.
And if dark clouds obscure your light,
A starless sky and dark midnight,
I ask you to not think of me;
Rather, let your soul be free.
The dawn will come with rosy grays
Then, noon time sun will break the haze!

The golden light will break your fears;
The warmest rays will dry your tears.
Althought my spirit will have left,
Never shall you need feel bereft.
For in the darkness, I am not close
It is only a passing ghost.
Do not fear their infernal wail
They are bound for eternal hell.

And if your vision my eyes do haunt
It is naught but unquenched want.
Do not busy your mind with me
Your life shall flow more easily.

To my bed I now retire
My breath, it has expired.
Spreading dark, I do not see
Good night my love, I die for thee.
©2005-2009 ~urlilpixie
:iconurlilpixie:

Author's Comments

Full title: Bedtime Prayer of the Romantic Atheist

For *jahg's competion, Fear of the Dark .

I decided to be a rhyming whore and be proud of my not-so-existant-though-it-should-so-I-us ed-it-anyways Southern accent while rhyming.

I'm not sure I met the standards required thematically, but it is also less than an hour before the deadline. And...it's what came out. And when I come up with something that I don't think is complete shit, it goes up. So...here you have it. Please comment, and good luck to all other competitors!!

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:iconprosepetals:
I have no critique. I'm :+fav:ing it...for very much reasons my own. Thank you for writing and sharing this.

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"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.
:iconteenagekiss:
This is amazing. Beautiful work. def. a fav! great piece-- i love meeting fellow writers so I shall watch your work if you do not mind.. :)

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Fashion is a form of ugliness so intolerable we have to alter it every six months.
:iconurlilpixie:
oh. :O_o: thanks for the fav, and the watch!
:iconurlilpixie:
thank you VERY much for the fave. And for reading it like, .5 seconds after I put it up...I'm glad you like it :)
:iconprosepetals:
Timing is everything. :laughing: This piece is very good. Beyond good. This piece is phenomenal. Fav'd for reasons I can't begin to express. :hug: You're awesome.

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"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.
:icontheclashoffenris:
Awesome.

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There's a mass without roofs
There's a prison to fill
There's a country's soul that reads post no bills
There's a strike and a line of cops outside of the mill
There's a right to obey
And there's a right to kill
:iconshatteredsanity:
WOW, i've only been on DevArt for about nine months but i can honestly say this is the best peice of poetry i've ever read. Definatly a Fave. I just love the way it's so sad but uplifting at the same time. Truely amazing :)

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A change to fix this dying soul...
.......This DYING SOUL!
:iconfirepixi3:
The third stanza seems a bit akward in reading, but overall one of the best of yours I've read.

Yeah yeah, I know... "I didn't ask you, go away."

Too bad. ;P

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